Window to the Soul

[GliscorMan]

That's right, poetry! Not what you were thinking? Well, I'll change your mind. Or at least that's my intention. Feedback if you want, I'll be adding to this occasionally with new poems as I revisit/create them. Happy reading!

Time's Ballad



Tick, tock goes the clock,
Looking down the city block.
People pass, so does time.
Tick, tock.
Standing sentinel at the top of the building,
Carefully counting the seconds building.
Tick, tock.
Measuring the seconds, minutes, hours,
He remains beyond all powers.
Tick, tock.
Fast or slow, we have no control.
He never, ever bores.
Tick, tock.
Tick, tock.
Never shall he die.



Summer's End



The clouds fade
from soft lavender
to deep purple.
A chill winds pick up,
to make one shiver
and carries the aroma
of woodsmoke in the distance.
A chorus of crickets
walks out for intermission
leaving the wind
to frolic in the leaves.



To Reason (My personal favorite)



Broken and fraught,
A man once sought
The truth, the way, and the will
To protect the world
From all that he could
So he walked with Lady Logic.

He asked of her
“How do I err
On the path for what I will?”
This Muse for he,
Ponders does she,
And so said Lady Logic:

“You have had enough,
so it may seem rough,
And make of it what you will,
But a Whale this weight
Is a task too great
Even for I, astute Lady Logic.”

He took her tips,
A smile on his lips,
For he finally found his will,
And walked away,
Into the Darkened fray,
Heeding his Lady Logic.

[Suicune's Fire]

Nice. XD I enjoyed all three, although there were a few things in the first one that I'm going to point out:


Standing sentinel at the top of the building,
Carefully counting the seconds building.
I understand you're meaning these in different contexts, but because it's said the same, it's like putting the same word, as opposed to it rhyming. So I wouldn't consider it a proper rhyme. x)


Fast or slow, we have no control.
He never, ever bores.
I don't know what you intended for this poem, but I think poems should have some degree of consistency, so I'm gonna go ahead and say that this doesn't rhyme. xD Might wanna make it rhyme.

The other thing is, the first part has three lines and the other two have two. I don't see an issue with the last one being one line since it's a conclusion as such. However, your intention may have been to gradually decrease the amount of lines, since the first one is three, then it goes two for the middle ones, and then one for the end. x) I dunno. Just wondering!

Anyhow, nice job with the poems. ^^ I love the image of the wind going to frolic in the leaves. xD It's a cute image. And the last one is cool, haha. I like the way you constructed it.


~SF.

[GliscorMan]

Thanks for the feedback!

In response to your points, I'd like to say that I rarely follow a specific rhyme scheme. I hate them. They frustrate me. Too constraining. Well, most of the time. In all, I'd rather follow a rhythmic pattern than a rhyme scheme.

Personally, I think poems are meant to be read aloud. If someone else would try that, I'd greatly appreciate it.

[Suicune's Fire]

xD Fair enough. And yeah, I see what you mean. x) Rhyming CAN be really frustrating.

Yeah, me too. :] Gives them another dimension.


~SF.