Quote Originally Posted by Grassy_Aggron View Post
Ha ha, it's all right. I understand preference wholeheartedly, and I certainly don't think less of you for that. i could've sworn you mentioned thief in the story though, which is where my confusion set in XD

As for wordy parts, it might have been me being really tired. It was 1 AM+ when I read it, so my mind was more than likely a little frazzled. It doesn't seem too bad when I reread it, there was just one part that felt a little wordy.

This is a single sentence. Don't get me wrong, I love the description in it, but I'm torn since I also feel like it might be a tad bit too long. I don't know >.<
Yay. ^.^ And nope. I just CTRL F'd it to make sure and there's no mention of thieves. xD

Oh lol. Oh, okay then! xD

XD No I totally get it. I did see that sentence, like, yesterday or something and thought, "Wow, did I seriously write a sentence that long?" XD I mean, I like that sentence and I'm not entirely sure how to break it up while keeping its effect, but I agree that it's too long. xD


~SF.