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    Tales of the Heart [Poetry by XaiakuX]

    Greetings!

    In this thread you will find writings of poetry all written by me.

    "Tales of the Heart" is simply a title, and not all of these poems will be of love or related subject matter. I just needed something catchy to get you to click on the thread. It appears to have worked.

    Since I don't need to remind you of PxR's Rules, I'll progress with a short list of poems written recently because I had a bit of spare time, and I wanted to write. I am open to criticism on the aspect of writing. The beauty of my writing is that it is open to the imagination. I desire to make it to where a person could relate to it in their own way.

    Also, don't worry, I know I usually have crazy catch graphics in the threads I post. I'll be working on that very soon.


    Remember that these are written by me, and I own them. Plagiarism is against the law, so if you like it a whole bunch, and you want to use it, it'd be wise to ask me for permission first. Much thanks, and enjoy reading!
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    A Moment of Eternity

    Her eyes are a sentence
    A story of fear and bliss
    Brown like the swirling fluid milk chocolate
    An industrial entity of happiness
    Before it hardens into the sweet treats which we enjoy
    A dream of joy in a gelatinous lie
    A hint of green around the irises
    A field of emptiness and deception
    Calm and soothing to contrast the inner chaos
    An inner war that refuses to see an end

    Beauty. By definition, her eyes need no description
    For the story tells itself
    A cheesy phrase turned irrevocable truth as it leaves my lips
    Out of an insatiable lust for affection
    'I require a map, for I am lost in the story that your eyes tell'
    A line which masks inner self loathing and desperation
    A smirk. To most, a signalling that failure is imminent
    To others, a witless joke
    To me, yet another story to be told
    A tale of insecurity and false hope

    They say that the eyes are the window to the soul
    They speak the only truth that matters
    We all have our demons, yet her soul was one of peace
    Peace is the greatest lie of humanity
    As if time stood still to allow me to hear her story from within
    An entity of imagination as reality stood in awkward silence
    All of this in a single moment. A moment of eternity
    While our eternity is but a blink in the eye of father time
    "..What?" She breaks the silence to begin this saga
    Confusion caressed by hesitant confrontation
    After? A journey that has yet to be written
    A story unable to be told for it progresses yet still

    Laugh, smile and love. Enjoy these precious moments
    You never know which moment will truly be your last


    This wasn't written about a person I know, but about a character. A character that I created written by another character that I created. A story, to me, of the joys and fears of falling in love. I also can't get over how cheesy that line is. I know it's kind of short, but I hope you enjoyed reading it. Much thanks. =]
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    Not only did I really like your poem, but it looks super cool how you did it with the different colors and such.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dragon Master Mike View Post
    Not only did I really like your poem, but it looks super cool how you did it with the different colors and such.

    Hey! I really appreciate it, man. The idea was to tell the same story from an optimistic point of view and pessimistic point of view. Hence the joys and fears of falling in love. I had to make it clear which side was which, so I changed the colors. xD
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    A Little Room With A Dying Light

    A little room with a dying light

    An inner war and unyeilding fight

    A struggle untested, a fearless might

    The soul fading from the once bright

    It would never make it through the night

    It would never survive the blight

    It would never hear their plight

    A little room with a dying light

    Inside we burn with undying fire
    Lusting and yearning with intense desire
    A feeling so strong we cannot hide
    We hold on so tightly until we've died

    Shine little bulb and show us all
    Show the room from your glass ball
    Feed us warmth from your fragile globe
    Then burn us all when you explode

    Outside we're firm and hard as stone
    We aren't afraid to be alone
    We show our strenght and continue on
    Although all we love is dead and gone

    Endure little room with your lasting size
    Hold strong while your dwelling dies
    Stay true while it all gets burned alive
    Stand strong as death grows and you survive.

    Stand in a room with a dying light

    We all stand in a room with a dying light

    Everyone stands in a room with a dying light

    A little room with a dying light

    Style wise, this poem is meant to be dark. Not so much graphic, because it's all mental. The mind, however, can be far more gruesome than anything reality can provide. I believe anime in general is proof of that. You should see the paper I originally wrote this on. It's messed up.
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    I enjoyed the first one, but I wasn't sure if I was supposed to read the red text and then the blue immediately after, line after line. At first I thought it wasn't meant to be read that way, but after I finished the red one and moved onto the blue one, I was like, "Oh, oops, this corresponds." xD So I reread it. You spelled "awkward" wrongly. I liked the poems. ^^ It was a really cool (pun intended...for the blue font...) contrast to the other side.

    For the second poem, for me, "hide" and "die" do not rhyme. Being really critical, in the first part, the line "The soul fading from the once bright" is slightly awkward because "the" would be capitalised on. For the poem as a whole, I enjoyed it. I did see the dark element as I read it. It sounds a lot to me like a war of some sort. o:

    Nice poems, dude. ^^

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    Quote Originally Posted by Suicune's Fire View Post
    I enjoyed the first one, but I wasn't sure if I was supposed to read the red text and then the blue immediately after, line after line. At first I thought it wasn't meant to be read that way, but after I finished the red one and moved onto the blue one, I was like, "Oh, oops, this corresponds." xD So I reread it. You spelled "awkward" wrongly. I liked the poems. ^^ It was a really cool (pun intended...for the blue font...) contrast to the other side.

    For the second poem, for me, "hide" and "die" do not rhyme. Being really critical, in the first part, the line "The soul fading from the once bright" is slightly awkward because "the" would be capitalised on. For the poem as a whole, I enjoyed it. I did see the dark element as I read it. It sounds a lot to me like a war of some sort. o:

    Nice poems, dude. ^^

    I've fixed all the typos. Considering I was on a laptop that didn't point out my typos as I made them (apparently ubuntu is a jerk), only having what... two? That's pretty solid writing. xD
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    Nothing Is What It Seems


    What is love but a dream
    What is death but a nightmare
    What is love but a nightmare
    What is death but a dream
    Valid questions with a single answer
    Nothing is what it seems

    What is love but a dream
    A heart ready to burst open at the seam
    A longing for acceptance we all feel
    The desire to make that feeling real

    What is death but a nightmare
    Sinister figure with an icy glare
    Skeletal frame with the scent of a corpse
    Brings you closer by will or by force


    What is love but a nightmare
    What happens to the passion we share
    Why is it already dead and gone
    Shattered like darkness by the break of dawn

    What is death but a dream
    Grim and cold, yet so inviting
    Does this entity wish me harm
    Or is that part of its unnatural charm

    A dream can be a nightmare
    A nightmare can be a dream
    Nothing lasts forever
    Nothing is what it seems


    I wrote this based on the title that I gave it. Because I feel like there are two side to everything. What you see and what you want, and what is real and what you end up with in the long run. Sometimes those things can end up being one and the same, other times it can be a horrible disaster waiting to happen. It's just one of those things I think about before I go to sleep.
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    I really enjoyed this one, probably most of all. I like that you challenged each idea twice, then dissected the challenge and flipped it on its head. xD It's cool. I think it was worded really well, with the excepting of "dream" not rhyming with "inviting." Normally that might not matter, but you were rhyming everything else. xD The only other error is your use of "it's" with that apostrophe when it should be "its" because you're using it in a possessive context.

    Nice writing, man. B) I enjoy it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Suicune's Fire View Post
    I really enjoyed this one, probably most of all. I like that you challenged each idea twice, then dissected the challenge and flipped it on its head. xD It's cool. I think it was worded really well, with the excepting of "dream" not rhyming with "inviting." Normally that might not matter, but you were rhyming everything else. xD The only other error is your use of "it's" with that apostrophe when it should be "its" because you're using it in a possessive context.

    Nice writing, man. B) I enjoy it.
    Inviting and dream can rhyme. It depends heavily on the flow and the way you enunciate the words in your head or aloud. For instance saying these words by themselves "in-vi-ting" and "dream" don't flow and it's awful. But mush "in-vi" into one syllable and add the "a" next to dream. "invi-ting" "a-dream". It sounds correct in my head. xD

    In this aspect I suppose it is rather confusing. The other error is totally my bad, and thus corrected. Thanks for reading. <3
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