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    Flying High

    This is one of my first attempts at poetry, so I'm sorry if it's not very good. But hopefully it's not totally crap!

    Flying High

    Above the fields of Hyrule
    Flies Zelda on her lavender unicorn
    With her golden hair flowing in the breeze
    And her unicorn's tail gently navigating behind.

    Her crystal blue eyes, perpetually alert and loving,
    Survey her vast land below
    As she gazes fondly on the kingdom
    Her father entrusted to her care.

    Zelda's heart swells with pride
    As she continues her journey
    And sees her people happy and working hard
    And the landscape lush with new spring grass.

    As long as she lives, Zelda vows,
    She will do all she can to protect her lovely land.
    And with her faithful unicorn perpetually by her side,
    She will be able to do just that.

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    Nicely written. C: I haven't played many Zelda games but she doesn't have a unicorn to my knowledge. Was that a part you made up? <:

    I liked the poem, although I would advise against the use of "perpetually" twice. Maybe "forever by her side" would work better. :] There wasn't really a flow to it, which I found a little jarring. Free verse is like that though, which I imagine this falls under, so with that in mind, I don't think there's any issue here. :] Poetry can be hard, so well done for starting! :D

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