[WAR] Season II: Creative Writing

[Neo Emolga]

*writes down all directions then raises hand* Can I also include a mustang in the story along with the dodger?

Hey, no problem with that! It's all good!

[Noblejanobii]

YES!! MY DREAM CAR LIVES!!

[Suicune's Fire]

Week Four Theme by NeoEmolga
The Phoenix Battalion

Originality (20/20)
Following Objectives (30/30)
Spelling and Grammar (9/10)
Flow and Transition (20/20)
Hook and Interest (20/20)

TOTAL: 99/100

Neo, I just have to say... Wow. This piece really can't be expressed in any other way than "WOW!"

I was not expecting such a twist as this, and I'm sure nobody else was, either! It's fun, it's interesting, and it has a really, really strong hook. All those parameters paired with an awesome theme?! Of COURSE you got full marks for those categories!


Your only downfall was the use of "lays" when it should have been "lies." You were NEARLY there! I'm very happy to award you those 99 points, though.



tl;dr:

OMG YES THIS IS GOING TO BE AWESOME.

[FedoraChar]

This weeks theme:

Spoiler:

And yes, I did make this especially for this xD Ah, the magic of photoshopping...

;D

alsoyouaretookindthankyou :'D

[Neo Emolga]

OMG YES THIS IS GOING TO BE AWESOME. [/FONT][/COLOR]

Ha! Ha! I love how you used my judging template. XD

And noes! Can't believe I made that silly error, but hey, close enough!

This weeks theme:

Spoiler:

And yes, I did make this especially for this xD Ah, the magic of photoshopping...

;D

alsoyouaretookindthankyou :'D

I JUST MADE THIS MY NEW PHONE WALLPAPER! AND IT WORKS PERFECTLY!

This is genius. Very genius! :D

[FedoraChar]

Wait, really? It fits?

....PERFECT! 8D This actually made my day xD

[Noblejanobii]

So, my four year old cousin saw me browsing over PXR and asked me to show her around. She really liked your prompt Neo. So, she made up a story about it, I helped her type it down, and here it is! I did correct a few spelling errors here and there, but this is as close to the original as you will get. So without further ado, here’s her entry titled, “Neo conquers the World.”

Spoiler:

There once was an Emolga named Neo. He was a bad Emolga. He was as mean as they got. He drove a big bad black Dodge Challenger and roared louder than a lion! He wanted to take over the world!
Neo journeyed far to the evil Land of the Dragons where he met with the Dragon King. Neo wanted an army of dragons to take over the world with. The Dragon King said no. Neo was very mad. He was so mad, he drew upon the power of his most powerful move, Forever Gold. The Dragon King was turned into gold. Neo used the golden Dragon King as payment to his army. He gave each dragon a piece of the gold, because everyone knows that dragons love gold.
With his army of dragons, Neo ventured back to his home world and easily took over the world until he reached the magical Angels Lands. There an army of angels was waiting to stop his advance. But the angels stood no chance against Neo! He ran them all over with his big bad black Dodge Challenger. With all the angels gone, Neo was able to take over the world and everyone lived evilly ever after.
The End

[Neo Emolga]

So, my four year old cousin saw me browsing over PXR and asked me to show her around. She really liked your prompt Neo. So, she made up a story about it, I helped her type it down, and here it is! I did correct a few spelling errors here and there, but this is as close to the original as you will get. So without further ado, here’s her entry titled, “Neo conquers the World.”

Spoiler:

There once was an Emolga named Neo. He was a bad Emolga. He was as mean as they got. He drove a big bad black Dodge Challenger and roared louder than a lion! He wanted to take over the world!
Neo journeyed far to the evil Land of the Dragons where he met with the Dragon King. Neo wanted an army of dragons to take over the world with. The Dragon King said no. Neo was very mad. He was so mad, he drew upon the power of his most powerful move, Forever Gold. The Dragon King was turned into gold. Neo used the golden Dragon King as payment to his army. He gave each dragon a piece of the gold, because everyone knows that dragons love gold.
With his army of dragons, Neo ventured back to his home world and easily took over the world until he reached the magical Angels Lands. There an army of angels was waiting to stop his advance. But the angels stood no chance against Neo! He ran them all over with his big bad black Dodge Challenger. With all the angels gone, Neo was able to take over the world and everyone lived evilly ever after.
The End

Guys, contest over, this just won the galaxy.

Game over, thanks for playing, so long and thanks for all the fish.

[Noblejanobii]

Guys, contest over, this just won the galaxy.

Game over, thanks for playing, so long and thanks for all the fish.

She also drew you a picture. I took a picture of it with my phone, so it's a big image.

Spoiler:

[Neo Emolga]

She also drew you a picture. I took a picture of it with my phone, so it's a big image.

Spoiler:

Oh dear, she even gave me fangs. So that's how the apocalypse happened! Oh man, this picture is just hilarious and adorable.

Note to self: Avoid becoming a vampire Emolga. Otherwise evil = very yes.