Originally Posted by
Scytherwolf
From the first sentence this story drew me in, and I was curious about how the escape was going to be made. I liked the details such as the boy having saved up poke balls for that exact day, and how he tired fairly quickly after running through the woods (like anyone would).
One of the things I really liked was how Ricky is starting his pokemon journey at an older age than the majority. I feel like that would put someone at a pretty big disadvantage, and it's not something I see a lot in stories but something I wish I saw more often. Things will be different for him than it would be for the average ten year old, and I'm curious to see how he will handle it.
Also, the pokemon. I for one LOVE when people put little details into the story that show more about the story's world. You have a lot of those here with the pokemon and their histories. It makes sense that there are more pokemon than just the standard starters, as they could easily not have enough of those or simply want to offer more variety to the trainers.
That fiery ursaring has me really curious. I'm very interested to see where that part of the story goes.
As for wording and typos, the story does very well. There was just this one part that confused me for a bit:
Should be 'for.'
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