Phantom of the Theather (Prompt Thread Week 11)

[EmeraldSky]

Okay...this was interesting, and a little hard to follow--it would help if we knew a little about who these characters are, and if the action was made a little clearer.

[Noblejanobii]

Okay...this was interesting, and a little hard to follow--it would help if we knew a little about who these characters are, and if the action was made a little clearer.

Gardia and Pace have appeared in a previous story, Weekly Prompt 8, where at least Gardia is developed a lot more but she always gives some indication into Pace's personality as well. The other three were going to have a much bigger role but I kept writing myself into a corner and never loving the outcome. I actually rewrote this about four different times so I get it's not going to be perfect. And I'm not sure what you mean by the action being clearer when much of the story is narrated and there isn't much fighting?