
Originally Posted by
Noblejanobii
Yeah I had someone else point out to me about the large paragraphs thing. It's a side effect from my RPing days, according to them, which I never even really thought about. That should be largely rectified in Chapter 2. There's a few instances in chapter 2 where there's like, a large paragraph but it's more of because the situation kind of warranted it? I can explain in more detail after you read it if you'd like.
You know what's funny is I had three beta readers on this and none of them pointed any of this out. XD And yeah, I don't see semicolons used that often so I tend to forget they exist sometimes. Hahaha whoops.
You'll find out what gijinka he is next chapter! In fact you'll find out quite a lot about him next chapter. ;)
Thanks! I'll look over your edits again later and see if I have any questions. I would right now but HOMEWORK.
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