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Suicune's Fire
You still need to edit your links properly so that they link to the actual picture, not the other link. x3
I've caught up, and I'm confused why Fisto's bublasaur was suddenly able to use solarbeam. Yes, you got rid of levels, but it's still a bulbasaur that has been with its trainer for like...half an hour. How could it already know solarbeam? As well as that, that was a really casual encounter between his dad and him. It was also random how Fisto was randomly unconscious after he just jumped out of the way of a hyper beam. He said his father's name, then was suddenly unconscious. xD Then he was knocked out at the Pokemon Center too, where his dad seemed to have dragged him? xD And Shaymin too?
There was no explanation why Shaymin was there, and if Serenity wanted it, why did she just leave it there when she vanished with that giratina? It's also odd that a random shaymin would suddenly agree to following a random kid it had never met before now. I'm tipping shaymin have important jobs, and for one to just agree to join this kid is unlikely and probably very irresponsible of it. XD As well as that, you never see Shaymin's opinion on anything...the father just sorta dictates what will happen and how the shaymin feels without consulting it first. Additionally, the father leaves with absolutely no concern for his son's safety, especially after his son encountered Team Metal, who he is apparently familiar with. I think, if I was that father, I would stick by my son's side and be really concerned about what might happen to him, especially after he was attacked.
I also don't know how the gym leader suddenly assumed he was a hero of legend. Wouldn't it take more than a single battle for him to be able to determine that? I mean, if anything, he should be impressed with the bulbasaur's exceptional power and ability to use higher-ranking moves at such a young age/low level. Not the trainer. XD He shouldn't get credit for an abnormally strong bulbasaur.
I'm not trying to bash the comic or anything, but it seems really rushed, and like everything is taking a but of an unrealistic turn. I mean, Fisto's just started his journey, and he's already got an overpowered starter, a LEGENDARY, and now a larvitar (who are well known to evolve into a very powerful pokemon), all for free. I also think you should take into account pokemon's genders. They all have genders so it would be suitable to include them in the narrative. I just wanted to point out some of the things I found odd and sudden, all of which you could work on to improve your comic. :]
Well done so far, although it would be nice to see these elements worked on.
~SF.
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