[PXFIRE] Comics

[Nekomata]

Week One
Scores!

Pardon the delays in judging. I've moved all the individual critiques into one post at the bottom of the previous page to reduce the clutter. Y'all did great- scripting is no easy feat!

As for scores, I graded each person individually based on the criteria given: Story, Originality, Characters, Organization, and Scope. Each individual score could go up to 500, meaning 100 points per grading criteria. For final points awarded to each member/team, I will add up the total score of ALL participants and dish out a percentage of the 100 points for the round based on those numbers.

Thanks for participating- it's been a lot of fun reading through these!

K'sariya
- Story: 90
- Originality: 80
- Character: 90
- Organization: 100
- Scope: 90

Total: 450

Your script was very detailed and easy to follow. The story overall was solid and in the span of just a few panels you were able to tell us a lot about the character. Great job!

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NobleJanobii
- Story: 80
- Originality: 80
- Character: 70
- Organization: 80
- Scope: 70

Total: 380

Overall your script was fairly strong! You lost points on character since I really didn't learn much about either character other that they're running from people. Lost points on scope for writing a script that couldn't reasonably fit on a single comic page. That aside- it was all pretty solid! Great job!

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Neo Emolga
- Story: 90
- Originality: 90
- Character: 100
- Organization: 90
- Scope: 90

Total: 460

At first I was just "Why is this character so cheery." I was going to take points off for the cheesiness until the last panel reveal made it all worth it. Wonderful twist! Just watch your paneling- it's within scope but for maximum effect you need to take full advantage of your page space.

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VeloJello
- Story: 90
- Originality: 80
- Character: 90
- Organization: 70
- Scope: 100

Total: 430

You really went all out in this one! Scope wise, I can easily see how the panels would all fit. Just watch your formatting a bit.

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Arnisd
- Story: 80
- Originality: 80
- Character: 80
- Organization: 50
- Scope: 70

Total: 360

The story was cute and well thought out! Just be sure to make your script clear and concise so that anyone could easily read it and make a page from it.

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evanfardreamer
- Story: 70
- Originality: 70
- Character: 50
- Organization: 30
- Scope: 90

Total: 310

Overall an interesting premise- but I find myself wanting more out of the page. You'd be surprised how much information you could squeeze into a single comic page. And of course- watch the organization. Good job though!

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Coru
- Story: 70
- Originality: 70
- Character: 70
- Organization: 80
- Scope: 90

Total: 400

Interesting premise but I find myself wanting to know more about the MC before throwing her into a situation like this. There's a lot you can tell about a character just through visuals. It does seem like a cut out of a larger story and that might be what hurts this- we don't have the background information on what's going on. Overall it was interesting and well put together though!

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Shruikan
- Story: 100
- Originality: 90
- Character: 100
- Organization: 90
- Scope: 100

Total: 480

Your story was simple and funny. It's hard to fit a story in one page and have it all tie up neatly with a bow at the end without feeling rushed. You were very good at setting your character. Incredible job!


Point Distribution

Total: 3250

K'sariya: 450/3250 = 14 points
NobleJanobii: 380/3250 = 12 points
Neo Emolga: 460/3250 = 14 points
VeloJello: 430/3250 = 13 points
Arnisd: 360/3250 = 11 points
evanfardreamer: 310 = 9 points
Coru: 380/3250 = 12 points
Shruikan: 480 = 15 points

Values were rounded up/down as needed to ensure beautiful whole numbers were present.

Points by Team

Avalon Apostles: 68 Points
The Sabotage Squadron: 23 Points
The Order of the Sun: 9 Points

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Just a reminder that Challenge #2 is up on the first page!
@K'sariya @Noblejanobii @Neo Emolga @VeloJello @arnisd @evanfardreamer @Coru @Shruikan