Quote Originally Posted by Morzone View Post
@Bulbasaur I mean, compared to other beginner RP'ers I've seen, you're doing pretty good.

It may be a good idea to read through other people's posts carefully for details of the area you're heading into with your characters.

For instance, in Shruikan's first RP post, their character got a message detailing destruction sited at the wormhole by Erana, implying people were already nearby or at the wormhole itself.

In my post, I revealed that one of the Team Claw branches had released a rampaging mamoswine to forcibly keep people away from the wormhole (something I based from the "large pokemon uprooting trees" that Shruikan heard about) while a poaching team captured rotoms that were reportedly coming through it.

In your latest post you implied your characters had made it there before anyone else and successfully captured an unknown (but clearly not rotom in nature based on its description coming through the wormhole) pokemon successfully. To be fair, it's not like that situation is implausible. You could, after all, have actually gotten there before anyone else and captured a pokemon even before Claw released the mamoswine. In which case there wouldn't be any conflict as to the true situation. But because the post came after other people's posts detailing the situation, it creates some confusion as to what's actually going on. Plus, your last post stated your character was in Trinox, which is in a whole different country, making getting to the wormhole in Erana first rather difficult, especially as there is no portal travel in Aluna and other organizations (which may have been stationed closer like Claw's West Branch) probably heard the news of the wormhole roughly the same time it would have gotten to you.

I probably shouldn't critique you though and leave that to Shruikan, as they are the judge after all. You're always welcome to shoot me a PM or VM if you have any questions though!
Thanks for the tips! No worries. :] I wasn't sure how far the locations were. So I wasn't really sure how to describe the trip.