GCEA Journal [Open]

[Suicune's Fire]

Awesome journal entry! We haven't got to see much of Kinnie's backstory so far so this delve into her history no matter how short really brings some light to her actions and somewhat standoffishness when compared to the rest of the group. Her relationship with her father intrigues me quite a bit. I like how he's seemingly just throwing her into the deep end of a pool and expects her to swim. She seems to be managing but I feel like she's a bit worried of what lies in rougher waters.

I only spotted one minor mistake, and it really didn't hinder the story at all so it's not going to count off:

There should be a comma after "Currently". Other than that it all looks good to me! Can't wait to read more from you!

15/15

Eep, I thought that was more of a style thing than anything. Maybe it's just because I've gotten lazy. XD

Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad that's what you got out of it because that's what I tried to communicate. Thanks Slooooaaane. <33