Words From The Grave {poetry}

[Suicune's Fire]

guilt has finally let me free.

I think this might be better as "set me free" or "freed me." ;]

Through the rain, sunbeams seep,
Painting a colourful ribbon-like strip.

"Seep" and "strip" don't quite rhyme. xD Strip would have to be said like "Streep..."

Through the rain, sunbeams seep,
Painting a colourful Meryl Streep.

XD

From the dark gloomy sky,
Fall frozen teardrops of ice.

"sky" and "ice" most certainly do not rhyme. xD As well as that, "ice" was used on the line before "From the dark gloomy sky."

You also spelled "Spatial" wrong twice, putting a c where there should be a t. In that same poem, you also rhymed "before" with "before." xD Doesn't count if it's the same word.

I really enjoyed all your poems. O: Notably the Sun and Moon one, and also Roar of Time. Changing Seasons was pretty awesome too. :] Some of the rhymes are questionable, but mostly they flow really well and have great substance to them. :D Well done. ^^ Sorry I didn't read any earlier. :C


~SF.