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I think this might be better as "set me free" or "freed me." ;]
Actually, you're right! Thanks~ :3


"Seep" and "strip" don't quite rhyme. xD Strip would have to be said like "Streep..."
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Good point, I didn't notice the difference until you mentioned. Rhyming is tough XD;

"sky" and "ice" most certainly do not rhyme. xD As well as that, "ice" was used on the line before "From the dark gloomy sky."
Why did I not realize this? ;o That moment when you look back on your first ever poem and cringe XD

You also spelled "Spatial" wrong twice, putting a c where there should be a t. In that same poem, you also rhymed "before" with "before." xD Doesn't count if it's the same word.
Actually 'spacial' is just an alternate spelling of 'spatial' xD I just stuck to the move's original word form. Speaking of rhyme, I don't like using corny rhymes or rhymes that are used for rhyming's sake. While reusing the same word may be unprofessional, I do think it counts and has a bit of repetitive device. x3

I really enjoyed all your poems. O: Notably the Sun and Moon one, and also Roar of Time. Changing Seasons was pretty awesome too. :] Some of the rhymes are questionable, but mostly they flow really well and have great substance to them. :D Well done. ^^ Sorry I didn't read any earlier. :C


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Thanks very much for the critique x3 Haha, it's alright. xD