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Dang good stuff!

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Ok, that was definitely a fun mini-mystery and adventure spinoff and at first I naturally thought the homeless guy, Andrew, was muttering nonsense until it hit Dylan “where did I hear that before” and then I knew what the significance was. Clever play on that! I also didn't think Brad having Cresslia on his team roster was going to be a factor beyond the battle Brad and Dylan had, but surprise!

Dylan’s investigation into Darkrai and his mission to capture it was a fun read and learning more about Brent’s life was great background as well. Nice job with this mini story, but now I’m curious to see how things will go for Dylan and Darkrai. Will Darkrai need that extra TLC to maintain control over like Deoxys did, or will it be a bit more amicable? I’m thinking its response is not going to be something I expect, though. You’re good at surprising the reader and avoiding common themes, tropes, and clichés, that’s for sure!

Also, that was a great way to wrap up the adventure and to finally learn Dylan’s safe from Neurofibromatosis 2. I didn’t even know that was a real medical disorder prior to reading this story, but props on doing your homework for it and finding an inventive way to implement it into this story.
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Glad you enjoyed it. I'm actually surprised at how well I managed to turn it into a mystery when anyone who has read spiritwater knows Dylan has Darkrai. Having Cresselia play a role in Dylan finding it added a layer of mystery to something that was already spoiled for lack of better words.

NF2 is actually a disorder that was in my family, hence why I was knowledgeable about it haha the only thing that I changed was that NF2 is actually a dominant gene, not recessive meaning that unless Dylan's mother inherited it from both parents, there was only a 50/50 chance he would have it, and it wouldn't give any incentive to find his father.

Much like Jon knowing each student needs something different, I think Darkrai will need a different type of attention to Deoxys. Darkrai's hurdles are that it isn't used to people and can't control its power completely. I have ideas on how Dylan will address that it but won't be anywhere near as long winded as Deoxys training.

My grandfather, his sister and his mother all had it. But nobody knew what it was until my mum was pregnant with me. She found out and got tested pretty quickly. Basically my grandfathers three kids all had a 50/50 chance of getting it, but miraculously none did, which means in our family it died with him.

Working on Epilogue 2 though need to make a point of getting some stuff done today. But will hopefully write that up today to wrap up season 3.