[WAR] Role Play: Terminus (Sign-Ups)

[Saraibre Ryu]

Bron, I make quotations so that people know what I'm responding to. You didn't change your post much aside from a few sentences. Also we have preview post for a reason, so I'm within my right to quote posts.

Anyway, basically as I said, having an emotionless character with a large chest is fine. Having a whole plot point about her and about the chest isn't exactly kid friendly. Make it more subtle and not in your face to read, and it should be fine.

Large you-know-what happening quickly > terrible back problems > doesn't want to get a reduction > alternative solution provided by Aqua > goes to work for Aqua after graduating.

See, now this isn't so bad of a description, you're already on your way there. Teenage development happens quickly, which leads to terrible back problems. Your character is female so we don't need to expressly detail what said problem is. It's obvious. She doesn't want to get surgery to solve the problem, but Aqua provides an alternate solution for her and thus she returns to Aqua after graduating. It's short, simple and to the point. Remember that not everything needs to be laid out in extreme detail, and the minimum explanation for certain things can be your friend. Remember that minimal description for some things doesn't mean it's making it less important.

You're a smart guy Bron, this isn't as difficult as it seems.