[WAR] Role Play: Terminus (Sign-Ups)

[bronislav84]

Please Sabi, never quote me without waiting at least a half hour if you insist on quoting. I edit my posts for at least a half hour after posting them. Your copy of my post is now outdated.

I completely get what you're saying, though it's a bit wordy for me. What exactly do you need me to change while still being able to preserve the character concept? You've mentioned the first image, and I'm removing it as soon as this post goes down. Also changing one of the other images because I found a more consolidated image of the figure and one of the previous figure images stopped working.

The back problems are a major character plot point, tough. It's the reason she's not in a wheelchair and explains her employment. I specifically made it true to life (A size like that would most likely cause a situation like this) and led this part of the story into her joining Aqua because of it. I can't de-emphasize that without the character becoming less than what it should be. I can try, though. I'm going to lower the amount of times I refer to parts of the body. Please tell me if it's good enough.

What else? Anything else? Please be specific.

BTW the comic relief bit is based on anime where girls with intentionally large and disproportionate (As in pretty much impossible IRL) chests get into trouble with men and are either clumsy or the female in question is considered desirable by every man except the one she actually likes. Cue romantic comedy. It's meant to lead her into what I hope will be funny encounters with either other players or NPCs I create, and make the reader smile just based on how she looks. She can change her clothes and appearance using older non CGI "movie magic" style techniques, but she can't change her body type. While the character herself is meant to be menacing and I'm expecting to rack up a body count with her, the way she looks is supposed to set readers at ease. Assuming people even read it, of course. I know some people don't read posts where their character isn't mentioned as affected.