[WAR] Resurgence

[Suicune's Fire]

It was this that framed my lilac hair,

It's slightly odd that the mane is referred to as the Suicune's "hair." xD

No doubt soon my body with join it, decaying along with the land.

Eliminate either 'with' or 'join' here. x)

A horrific calamity had then occurred in which a lightning bolt struck the tower, causing a fight to light.

Ugh, I hate it when fights are lit.

The sudden appearance of gale winds and rain dowsed the fire, but not before it claimed the lives of three Pokemon that were unable to escape in time.

It's sort of odd that you would call the gale winds and rain "sudden," and then say "not before this happened" because the imagery was fairly instantaneous. The elimination of "sudden" would probably solve it. x)


Nice story. c: It was really interesting that Suicune's memories were connected to the land. I've never seen that interpretation before, although to be fair I've barely read any stories with Suicune. xD I was a little confused at some parts, such as where the budew came from at the end, and I wasn't sure if she (?) was running on the water or beside it, because of the leaf thing...maybe I misread something. xD Anyway, I liked the story. I found it weird that the Suicune didn't know what Ho-Oh's gender was, as the voice should be fairly indicative.

Cool interpretation of nature!


~SF.