[WAR] Sebastian

[Suicune's Fire]

When he did decide to finally talk
It was quite honestly not a big shock

"Talk" and "shock" don't really rhyme. xD Or, well, with my accent they don't. I can understand how it would work better with an American accent, but even then, "shock" sounds different to, say, "chalk" if that had a "sh" sound at the beginning.

Surely but steady he began to gain weight

"steady" should be "steadily" if it's like "surely" and meant to be an adverb.

I can keep on writing this exciting poem
Letting my words out to be free, to roam

These certainly don't rhyme. To me, "poem" is to be said "poe-em" and not "pome." xD So this sort of really tripped up the flow for me.

I will do anything, I will even kick booty

Minor pick; this comma should be a semicolon. x) I love the line though. xD

All in all, a cute poem. I liked how you told the story of how you met him and went into why he means so much to you. I love my cat as well, so it was definitely relatable. :D

Nicely written, except a few things I pointed out. That may have been preference though. xD


~SF.