Quote Originally Posted by Suicune's Fire View Post
I really enjoyed this one, probably most of all. I like that you challenged each idea twice, then dissected the challenge and flipped it on its head. xD It's cool. I think it was worded really well, with the excepting of "dream" not rhyming with "inviting." Normally that might not matter, but you were rhyming everything else. xD The only other error is your use of "it's" with that apostrophe when it should be "its" because you're using it in a possessive context.

Nice writing, man. B) I enjoy it.
Inviting and dream can rhyme. It depends heavily on the flow and the way you enunciate the words in your head or aloud. For instance saying these words by themselves "in-vi-ting" and "dream" don't flow and it's awful. But mush "in-vi" into one syllable and add the "a" next to dream. "invi-ting" "a-dream". It sounds correct in my head. xD

In this aspect I suppose it is rather confusing. The other error is totally my bad, and thus corrected. Thanks for reading. <3