[WAR Season II RP] Arcane Pokéworld [SU/DT]

[LKWayvern]

I'm surprised but happy I got an honorable mention. I really wasn't expecting to get mentioned at all. Most of the RPs I go into have really short posts, and usually if you go offline for an hour or so you suddenly have 20 pages to catch up on. One of the main reasons I'm trying out in this particular thread is I'm trying to work on getting out longer RP posts.
Okay, I'm going to try to aim for even longer next week. >:3

[Eri]

was it content or delivery ?

i think im gonna use 1st person on next one.

[bronislav84]

Delivery. The delivery pretty much killed me wanting to even read the post past the second paragraph. Just going off length you probably would have had a shot at third place if not for the script format.

@Daixtey Sorry, late entry. This will be counted for next week.

[Eri]

alright cool. ill make changes in the future.

[Morzone]

Hmm I wonder why I didn't get any points this week- oh yeah, its cause all I had were TRAVEL POSTS. God morzone stop being a really boring RP'er. sheesh.

Congrats to the three winners this week!

[bronislav84]

Don't get me wrong Mor, it was good length wise. Just travel posts are always boring and I was definitely bored. I read it all of course.

[Morzone]

Its completely understandable and justified, I just wish I could've been a little more interesting with them, kinda like Sabi did in the first week. I still have next week (or I suppose its this week now) to get some action in.

[Morzone]

Really Really sorry for double posting in the rp thread, but as Neo put it: the ball needs to keep rolling.

Also apologies to the phoenix battalion, it wasn't personal. You guys just have the most people and your all pretty good at RP, and team trainer already has to deal with NPCs complaining about their world order. Seriously sorry for the inconvenience.

[bronislav84]

Points! Fair and unbiased. Easy judging this week. Only three people posting, so all get points. I just gotta decide which I like more. I've decided that Grassy and Neo get interchangeable points again, and here's why. Now, while I see you two as tied I still have to choose who to give points to for official sake. Just know I liked the posts equally.

First: Grassy I liked the Dubious Disk thing. It was subtle, but the way it was implied was hilarious. It was also a cool twist that her machine was used in the attack, and the mechanical Pokemon being tested were interesting. Maybe you'll have time to get somewhere with that next week, maybe not.

Second: Neo you had you character almost catch the suspect, which was kind of suspenseful until your character got beaned on the head. Very interesting. Also liked the creative use of spells, though you used two in one of the posts. Not really an issue though since it wasn't PVP. Trainer seems to not actually be doing anything in terms of player characters. Sad, really.

Third: Morzone your post is suspenseful all around, but had me a bit confused. You also bunnied a bit in this quote.

The mechari doctor spun around in surprise as Shawn ran toward her.

This is not for you to decide, sorry.

So were you trying to pin the blame on PB for the bomb attack by finding that insignia? This is confusing to me. Well written, but confusing. The confusion and the bunnying is why you're third. Well that and that Neo and Grassy just had me engaged more. But hey, you did good man.

[Morzone]

Sorry about the confusion.

1st: sorry about the bunnying, I got caught up in trying to make the scene realistic as possible and forgot, won't happen again, I promise.

As for the insignia, I was trying to make it sound like someone related too PB did it, but not PB itself, (IE an extremist group who was part of PB but was acting on their own accord) It would've been cleared up some more in later posts, but I got busy and I can't update while I travel.

Also: is this rp going to continue after WAR ends? or not?