[WAR Season II RP] Arcane Pokéworld [SU/DT]

[Eri]

was it content or delivery ?

i think im gonna use 1st person on next one.

[bronislav84]

Delivery. The delivery pretty much killed me wanting to even read the post past the second paragraph. Just going off length you probably would have had a shot at third place if not for the script format.

@Daixtey Sorry, late entry. This will be counted for next week.

[Eri]

alright cool. ill make changes in the future.

[bronislav84]

Points! Fair and unbiased. Surprised there's nothing from Neo this week. I was expecting something explosive.

First: Grassy gets top marks again. The talking truck really had me laughing, but she also managed to have some serious technical stuff happen as well in those two posts. I liked the magic based electricity machine and the detailed description of that, even if it doesn't quite work how she wants yet. This character is just really creative and manages to surprise me. But then again Grassy always has been good at this sort of thing.

Second: Aiku. The explanation of killing the Chua and the way he just calmly wants to bury the dead was amusing. I also liked the "tell them yourself" bit. I'm a bit surprised you scored here, but the fact that he's all calm and collected in the midst of the dead and his explanation just made me like this post.

Third: purple umbreon. I liked the drama with her mother and it made me sad that she was so depressed but her daughter left her due to not understanding that this is needed. Kind of an emotional scene there.

Honorable mentions: Dammit I wish I could have given some points to Sabi for the yelling at Lance and the suspense at the end, but I feel that the child leaving home and the emotional scene by purple moved me more.

Daixtey was also pretty cool in putting out the fire. Not a lot happened in that post though.

Death's Spook I also considered you for third place, but then I realized that not a lot happened in your post either. I REALLY liked Michael's internal thoughts but I felt the home drama by purple was just emotional. If you could post more like that and the others don't or post uneventful stuff, you're sure to get points next week.

[Morzone]

Hmm I wonder why I didn't get any points this week- oh yeah, its cause all I had were TRAVEL POSTS. God morzone stop being a really boring RP'er. sheesh.

Congrats to the three winners this week!

[bronislav84]

Don't get me wrong Mor, it was good length wise. Just travel posts are always boring and I was definitely bored. I read it all of course.

[Morzone]

Its completely understandable and justified, I just wish I could've been a little more interesting with them, kinda like Sabi did in the first week. I still have next week (or I suppose its this week now) to get some action in.

[Morzone]

Really Really sorry for double posting in the rp thread, but as Neo put it: the ball needs to keep rolling.

Also apologies to the phoenix battalion, it wasn't personal. You guys just have the most people and your all pretty good at RP, and team trainer already has to deal with NPCs complaining about their world order. Seriously sorry for the inconvenience.

[bronislav84]

Points! Fair and unbiased. Easy judging this week. Only three people posting, so all get points. I just gotta decide which I like more. I've decided that Grassy and Neo get interchangeable points again, and here's why. Now, while I see you two as tied I still have to choose who to give points to for official sake. Just know I liked the posts equally.

First: Grassy I liked the Dubious Disk thing. It was subtle, but the way it was implied was hilarious. It was also a cool twist that her machine was used in the attack, and the mechanical Pokemon being tested were interesting. Maybe you'll have time to get somewhere with that next week, maybe not.

Second: Neo you had you character almost catch the suspect, which was kind of suspenseful until your character got beaned on the head. Very interesting. Also liked the creative use of spells, though you used two in one of the posts. Not really an issue though since it wasn't PVP. Trainer seems to not actually be doing anything in terms of player characters. Sad, really.

Third: Morzone your post is suspenseful all around, but had me a bit confused. You also bunnied a bit in this quote.

The mechari doctor spun around in surprise as Shawn ran toward her.

This is not for you to decide, sorry.

So were you trying to pin the blame on PB for the bomb attack by finding that insignia? This is confusing to me. Well written, but confusing. The confusion and the bunnying is why you're third. Well that and that Neo and Grassy just had me engaged more. But hey, you did good man.

[Morzone]

Sorry about the confusion.

1st: sorry about the bunnying, I got caught up in trying to make the scene realistic as possible and forgot, won't happen again, I promise.

As for the insignia, I was trying to make it sound like someone related too PB did it, but not PB itself, (IE an extremist group who was part of PB but was acting on their own accord) It would've been cleared up some more in later posts, but I got busy and I can't update while I travel.

Also: is this rp going to continue after WAR ends? or not?