YES!! MY DREAM CAR LIVES!!
Week Four Theme by NeoEmolga
The Phoenix Battalion
Originality (20/20)
Following Objectives (30/30)
Spelling and Grammar (9/10)
Flow and Transition (20/20)
Hook and Interest (20/20)
TOTAL: 99/100
Neo, I just have to say... Wow. This piece really can't be expressed in any other way than "WOW!"
I was not expecting such a twist as this, and I'm sure nobody else was, either! It's fun, it's interesting, and it has a really, really strong hook. All those parameters paired with an awesome theme?! Of COURSE you got full marks for those categories!
Your only downfall was the use of "lays" when it should have been "lies." You were NEARLY there! I'm very happy to award you those 99 points, though.
tl;dr:
OMG YES THIS IS GOING TO BE AWESOME.
This weeks theme:
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alsoyouaretookindthankyou :'D
Last edited by FedoraChar; 06-29-2015 at 02:57 AM.
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Little Lizard's Library of Tales
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Number III, the Argent Flame
Wait, really? It fits?
....PERFECT! 8D This actually made my day xD
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Little Lizard's Library of Tales
Paired withSlenderfairyComatose
Number III, the Argent Flame
So, my four year old cousin saw me browsing over PXR and asked me to show her around. She really liked your prompt Neo. So, she made up a story about it, I helped her type it down, and here it is! I did correct a few spelling errors here and there, but this is as close to the original as you will get. So without further ado, here’s her entry titled, “Neo conquers the World.”
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