Through the Eyes of a Flareon [PG] (Chapter 31 FINALLY up)

[Suicune's Fire]

Don't nag me and let me critique you. Even if you've already fixed it it's good to hear.

I was messing with you. :P Jokes. Though mentally I've been pronouncing it "eye-xanthe" so the misspelling wasn't intentional.

No you misunderstand. I was saying that the description of the trainer during the scene where the Golem's nickname isn't mentioned does make sense. It's not out of place. Whereas the description of Dusty's trainer did seem somewhat out of place. That's what I meant.

Yeah but when it's something you've written eight years ago, ya know, the critique is a little irrelevant. xD I appreciate you pointing things out though. If I was writing it these days, things would be different.

That's why I corrected you. xD To be like "Umm that's not how you say it." Lel.

Psst. It's his name, not his 'nickname.' Oh, I see. Well I was also responding to this bit: "Now the part where the golem's nickname wasn't used it made sense but otherwise it wasn't really necessary." I was contesting its apparent irrelevance. Perhaps I misunderstood. Lel.

Sorry if I sound defensive or anything. Since I wrote this so long ago, I don't really see myself changing much. xD Part of me wishes you could just skip to later chapters where everything is better written, lelel. You should have seen this before it had an overhaul. XD It was horrid. But, I mean, it's not like it matters that I didn't write as well when I was younger. x) It was good by my standards back then, so I don't mean to hate on my earlier self. XD

[Noblejanobii]

Yeah but when it's something you've written eight years ago, ya know, the critique is a little irrelevant. xD I appreciate you pointing things out though. If I was writing it these days, things would be different.

That's why I corrected you. xD To be like "Umm that's not how you say it." Lel.

Psst. It's his name, not his 'nickname.' Oh, I see. Well I was also responding to this bit: "Now the part where the golem's nickname wasn't used it made sense but otherwise it wasn't really necessary." I was contesting its apparent irrelevance. Perhaps I misunderstood. Lel.

Sorry if I sound defensive or anything. Since I wrote this so long ago, I don't really see myself changing much. xD Part of me wishes you could just skip to later chapters where everything is better written, lelel. You should have seen this before it had an overhaul. XD It was horrid. But, I mean, it's not like it matters that I didn't write as well when I was younger. x) It was good by my standards back then, so I don't mean to hate on my earlier self. XD

I'll try to keep pointing out things as I go along but don't expect much unless it's glaring. I mainly did this to practice reviewing.

lol I'll probably forget between now and the next chapter and still say it like that.

Yeah my wording was a bit weird but eh.

I mean we're all defensive of our old works so it's cool.

[Suicune's Fire]

I'll try to keep pointing out things as I go along but don't expect much unless it's glaring. I mainly did this to practice reviewing.

lol I'll probably forget between now and the next chapter and still say it like that.

Yeah my wording was a bit weird but eh.

I mean we're all defensive of our old works so it's cool.

Ah cool then. I'll try not to take the things you say to heart. XD

NO. STAHP. Maybe I should do a pronunciation guide thing for a few characters though because some are a bit weird. xD

True. xD

[Noblejanobii]

Ah cool then. I'll try not to take the things you say to heart. XD

NO. STAHP. Maybe I should do a pronunciation guide thing for a few characters though because some are a bit weird. xD

True. xD

Lol well I man if it helps you then it helps.

Maybe I should pronounce it "It-Zayneth".