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[Rival Max]

GCEA version: Platinum
Trainer Name: Renny Thomas
Link to your trainer stats: In Sig
Link to the post the submission is based on/summary of the event: Renny is writing about his experince seeing and recording a legendary pokemon for the first time.
Word Count: 657
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Blog Entry 1


I’ve been meaning to create a written blog that would chronical my journey. My current circumstances have allowed for time to finally to start this. Granted I would prefer the schedule that I had back home. Being off my schedule is making me feel a little uncomfortable. Don’t fret reader I have Arnny here with me and she always provides clarity in times when the world starts to get a little hazy.
Let’s get back to the focus of what these blogs will cover. I intend to create a vlog series that will be posted once I get back home. The Vlog will show the raw uncut story of this crazy journey. As for this blog It can be used as extra content for those of you who will eventually get to see the multiple part series that is my journey through “Other World Sinnoh”.
Tonight, is my first night in this world’s Sinnoh and I have to say I am warn out. In just one day I met two different professors in two different worlds who couldn’t be more opposite. I got the opportunity to pick two new traveling partners and the unique chance to not only see a legendary pokemon but to get real footage of how it moves. All of this was on top of seeing one of the most infamous groups in my world, Team Galactic. Though the Team Galactic here seems to be masking their power in my humble opinion. The alternative is a depressingly bland Team Skull clone. At least here these fools aren’t dancing around.
I know what you’re thinking reader, you want me to shut up and give you details on my run in with the legendary pokemon. Well impatient web surfer prepare yourself for a somewhat exciting or disappointing story depending on you feel afterword’s. The pokemon in question is called Mesprit, one of the three lake guardian here in Sinnoh. It’s not a pokemon I was familiar with so I needed to study up on it before posting this. It turns out that based on Sinnoh Mythos, Mesprit is said to be the birth of emotion. When it flew over people it brought joy and pain. Mesprit is one of two pokemon in the grouping “emotion pokemon”. The other being Kirlia who is also here in Sinnoh. As you can imagine a pokemon who brings emotion brought plenty in our first meeting. Though its hard to say with all the emotions from the team I’m with battling the Team Galactic what if any emotions the pokemon added.

I think what stood out most to me was its speed and grace. It floated for a moment above the chaos reddened battle field watching all of us. Its gaze scanned every single person and even stopped on me for a moment. I wondered what it was looking it or better yet what it was looking for. It was clear that it wasn’t any of us as it quickly dashed off into the tree line almost as fast as it had appeared. Its speed was hard to comprehend and even harder to film.

After it flew away the following events like were like watching a football game. I just didn’t really care about them. We were asked to follow Grey Beard back to his lab where he has addressed us individually. None of that really mattered though. What was interesting though was the volume of books he kept on pokemon. I love to read when I can. Normally though I prefer fiction but given a lack of any decent reading material my curiously about this new world got the better of me.
Well its that time reader I am being called into an office for something. I’ll be attaching some digital photos I took today. Some are from Alolah and meeting Val and others are of the strange vortex that brought me here. Until next time, Renny

[Suicune's Fire]

There's not really a form sooo I just kinda adapted one.

Ooh yes there never really was one. I went back to GCEA Emerald to see what I had written and it was just the trainer name, the entry number, and the date of the entry. xD But I've made a form at the top, just for consistency.

I really liked your journal entry! Amy seems to be quite strong-willed and I can really tell she's trying to be brave in this weird, new environment with strangers. I liked her overview of each character and each of her pokemon as well. Overall I think you (she) very nicely summed up what's happened so far, which hasn't been much, so nicely done. I found two errors:

I have four pokemon to my name right and we’re looking to be a pretty decent team.

I believe that should say "right now." Easy miss!

He and a girl named Kennie are two that I really want to talk to more in the future. Moreso Kennie than Renny, since she’s kinda cute.

It's Kinnie, not Kennie! XD
but also 5 billion extra points for that last part

Aside from that, you were all good. Your writing was great, and the content was relevant and an insight into Amy.

Total: 15/15 points.




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Sorry, bud, but I'm gonna have to quote you on a few misspellings! This is just to try to help, so you don't make the same misspellings again. :) However, it could also be part of your character, which especially fits in with the online blogging motif.

I’ve been meaning to create a written blog that would chronical my journey.

Should be "chronicle."

Tonight, is my first night in this world’s Sinnoh and I have to say I am warn out.

To warn is to give warning; something that is worn is tired.

Well impatient web surfer prepare yourself for a somewhat exciting or disappointing story depending on you feel afterword’s.

Forgot "how" in between 'on' and 'you', and that last word should be "afterwards."

It floated for a moment above the chaos reddened battle field watching all of us.

I think here you mean "riddled."

Some are from Alolah and meeting Val and others are of the strange vortex that brought me here.

Alola doesn't have an h on the end.

I would also suggest spacing out the paragraphs because it's easier for the eyes to follow. You did new lines, but the extra blank line space between would help a little. You did it at parts, just not with every paragraph. :)


Anyway, I enjoyed Renny's entry! I haven't seen a GCEA journal done as a blog entry before but, I mean, it's relevant to the current times and Renny seems like a blogger. XD He's an interesting character because he seems somewhat detached from his inner thoughts or emotions, and I say that because he seems to focus a lot on filmmaking and things like his blog rather than writing about how he's feeling in response to time/space travel, his fellow teammates, his new pokemon, etc. It's really interesting and different!

Aside from the grammatical and spelling errors (which, again, could be part of Renny's character especially given he's so focused on what he's saying that he wouldn't proofread xD), it was a great entry and I liked reading something written from Renny's perspective! I look forward to seeing more of him.

Total points: 14/15

[Noblejanobii]

but also 5 billion extra points for that last part

I like your judging style. ;)