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[Suicune's Fire]

Granted it was a rock type gym so when you have two water types on your team it’s going to be a breeze.

Missing a few commas here. There should be one after "Granted," "gym" and "team."

Only if Freya wants to evolve though.

Since we're being picky about commas, one before "though." ;)

I can’t remember if I’ve told you about her in the past, I’ve babbled about so many different designers and stylists I doubt you remember them all.

These can be two separate sentences, so in this type of instance, you need a semicolon. Commas are only for run-on sentences whose segments can't be separate on their own. Also the absence of "that" after "stylists" calls for a need for punctuation there. I'd say another semicolon since having a comma would be incorrect due to the fact that the sentences would be able to sit separately. But then you have two semicolons within three sentences, so a change of structure may be called for instead.

She’s a stylist well known for her work on contest Pokémon since contests are very big in Sinnoh.

Comma before "since."

I must’ve been red as a beet I was blushing so hard when she said.

Same issue with this. Because you've removed the joining word in this sentence, it becomes two sentences when written. When spoken, you can't hear the punctuation, but when it's written, it needs it. The whole sentence in general is awkwardly worded.

He’s still wearing it since he’s evolved.

This should be "He's been wearing it since he evolved" because "since" is past tense, but "he's still" is present tense. If it said "He's still wearing it even after he evolved" then it would make sense, but not the way it's worded currently.

revealing this all to have been some scent candle induced dream.

Should be a hyphen between 'candle' and 'induced.' Also should be 'scented.'

There were other places where you missed commas or other punctuation but I didn't bother quoting it because I was just going to be repeating myself. XD I also do allow for a character's writing style, but I figured you'd want to be marked a little more harshly because that's how you mark too. ;) Just be aware that phrases you say aloud don't translate to written passages, because writing and speaking are very different things. You can skip over punctuation while speaking, but skipping it while writing is incorrect grammar. Don't worry, I'm certainly guilty of this too. xD It's the casual grammarless style of today's written conversations.

Anyway, I really liked reading about Amy's thoughts regarding how much she misses Theresa and the fact that she had no idea how much she mentioned her until other people made her aware. I think we can all relate to unconscious habits, especially when they come from a place of joy or excitement. Reading about her cold beds was sad, though. Poor Amy. :( Being in this situation for real would be really terrifying. It's hard to believe it's only been three in-game days though. Feels like so much has happened already.

13/15 points total. Great journal entry, but you had a lot of fixable grammar errors.