Words From The Grave {poetry}

[Ganyu]

Changing Seasons
The birds began to sing,
As winter melts into spring.
Trees bud and flowers bloom,
Leaving no trace of winter's gloom.

As the summer sun arrives,
Temperature levels rise.
During this time, people go on a holiday,
To the beach, bay or a luxury chalet.

The weather gets colder,
As autumn draws nearer.
Brown leaves fall off, as light as a feather,
Where they land is unpredictable as the weather.

Winter grips the land with jaws of a steel vice,
The earth is covered in glacial glossy ice.
From the dark gloomy sky,
Fall frozen teardrops of ice.

[Ganyu]

Omg I almost forgot about this. ;; Anyways~

Aurora (Acrostic)
Amazing rainbows above the ice,
Utter joy as I watched with my eyes.
Ribbons of colours across the spectrum,
Opal green, azure and orange autumn.
Radiant energy illuminates the horizon,
Above a barren region eternally frozen.

[Ganyu]

Roar of Time
I heard the roar of time,
So majestic and sublime.
Its humming echoed far and wide,
Its noble currents rang with pride.

I heard the roar of time,
Beautiful like a bell's chime.
I watched the earth's grime,
Transform into clean rime.

It was filled with rapture,
As it held space in its capture.
Waves of purifying energy,
Pitched with a dazzling melody.

It rid the land of sin and cleansed it,
With magic and calmness so sweet.
As the roar died down like a falling meteor,
It left everyone with pure joy and utter awe.

[Ganyu]

Starry Night Sky
Cloak of darkness, cooling and calm,
I wish I could hold it in my palm.
Adorned with sparkling jewels so bright,
Embedded with a pale pearl of light.

Dark, cobalt and midnight blue,
With puffs of a faint purple hue.
Waves of moonlight drawn above the city,
Your idea of a depicted beauty.

When your sanity started to decline,
You imprisoned in that dull confine.
You speak of it with low esteem,
But it's not worthless as you deem.

[Ninaiso]

Words can not express how much I love your poetry. <3 Just wow.

[Ganyu]

Words can not express how much I love your poetry. <3 Just wow.

I've to really thank you for continuing to read the stuff I post. XD That means a lot.
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Spacial Rend
I saw the rend of space,
Such a mythical passing phase.
As the light of day darkened,
And the dark of night brightened.

I saw the rend of space,
Constantly changing its trace.
I saw rainbows bending in different directions,
And objects changing in different dimensions.

Colours never seen before,
Temperatures never felt before.
The universe fluctuated,
As the rend graduated.

A paradigm shift,
By a spacial rift.
Fire and ice combined,
Polar opposites defined.

The almighty and omnipresent
Power by which heavens ascend.
Hanging precariously on a whim,
The balance of matter so slim.

Since I wrote Roar of Time, I feel obliged to write its 'brother' to accompany it. :3

[Suicune's Fire]

guilt has finally let me free.

I think this might be better as "set me free" or "freed me." ;]

Through the rain, sunbeams seep,
Painting a colourful ribbon-like strip.

"Seep" and "strip" don't quite rhyme. xD Strip would have to be said like "Streep..."

Through the rain, sunbeams seep,
Painting a colourful Meryl Streep.

XD

From the dark gloomy sky,
Fall frozen teardrops of ice.

"sky" and "ice" most certainly do not rhyme. xD As well as that, "ice" was used on the line before "From the dark gloomy sky."

You also spelled "Spatial" wrong twice, putting a c where there should be a t. In that same poem, you also rhymed "before" with "before." xD Doesn't count if it's the same word.

I really enjoyed all your poems. O: Notably the Sun and Moon one, and also Roar of Time. Changing Seasons was pretty awesome too. :] Some of the rhymes are questionable, but mostly they flow really well and have great substance to them. :D Well done. ^^ Sorry I didn't read any earlier. :C


~SF.

[Ganyu]

I think this might be better as "set me free" or "freed me." ;]

Actually, you're right! Thanks~ :3

"Seep" and "strip" don't quite rhyme. xD Strip would have to be said like "Streep..."
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Good point, I didn't notice the difference until you mentioned. Rhyming is tough XD;

"sky" and "ice" most certainly do not rhyme. xD As well as that, "ice" was used on the line before "From the dark gloomy sky."

Why did I not realize this? ;o That moment when you look back on your first ever poem and cringe XD

You also spelled "Spatial" wrong twice, putting a c where there should be a t. In that same poem, you also rhymed "before" with "before." xD Doesn't count if it's the same word.

Actually 'spacial' is just an alternate spelling of 'spatial' xD I just stuck to the move's original word form. Speaking of rhyme, I don't like using corny rhymes or rhymes that are used for rhyming's sake. While reusing the same word may be unprofessional, I do think it counts and has a bit of repetitive device. x3

I really enjoyed all your poems. O: Notably the Sun and Moon one, and also Roar of Time. Changing Seasons was pretty awesome too. :] Some of the rhymes are questionable, but mostly they flow really well and have great substance to them. :D Well done. ^^ Sorry I didn't read any earlier. :C


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Thanks very much for the critique x3 Haha, it's alright. xD

[Suicune's Fire]

Actually, you're right! Thanks~ :3

Good point, I didn't notice the difference until you mentioned. Rhyming is tough XD;

Why did I not realize this? ;o That moment when you look back on your first ever poem and cringe XD

Actually 'spacial' is just an alternate spelling of 'spatial' xD I just stuck to the move's original word form. Speaking of rhyme, I don't like using corny rhymes or rhymes that are used for rhyming's sake. While reusing the same word may be unprofessional, I do think it counts and has a bit of repetitive device. x3

Thanks very much for the critique x3 Haha, it's alright. xD

xD No worries!

Lol yes, rhyming is tough. If you don't already have something to help you rhyme, Rhymezone is helpful. :D I've used it many a time.

XDD haha, well if it's your first one ever then you have an excuse. x3

Oh wow, I didn't even know that. XD Nice to know. And yes, I know, but a word doesn't rhyme with itself. xD It's like saying a colour matches itself. I could understand if you were talking about repeating the word two lines down, but considering you were rhyming everywhere else, it doesn't fit trying to rhyme with itself. But whatever; it's your poem. xD

No worries. 8D

[Ganyu]

Oh wow, I didn't even know that. XD Nice to know. And yes, I know, but a word doesn't rhyme with itself. xD It's like saying a colour matches itself. I could understand if you were talking about repeating the word two lines down, but considering you were rhyming everywhere else, it doesn't fit trying to rhyme with itself. But whatever; it's your poem. xD

I do agree that it breaks the rhythm. But *whispers* I like to be a rebel sometimes XD;;