[SUDS] Cycles of Power (High T-Low M)

**Death's Spook** · 02-03-2014, 11:38 PM

Excellent.

And one last thing to everyone: I'm kinda getting annoyed at all the duplicate powers. Even powers that have similar functions should have different mechanisms. In fact, I strongly suggest that if I haven't accepted you yet and you duplicated a power someone else has, you should definitely modify it so that it's different: if not in what it accomplishes, then in how it accomplishes it. I'm very liable to not accept duplicates.

**Grassy_Aggron** · 02-04-2014, 02:46 AM

Originally Posted by Death's Spook

Good luck /finding/ them. Orre's wilds are all hiding. Snag Machines are obsolete as a whole. You could theoretically kill someone and take their Pokemon, but it's very probable that some of their Pokemon and some of yours will die, making it extremely likely that you will not have more than six

Also, RP goes up tomorrow. It was going to go up today, but I need rest because I'm sick.

Yeah. Silia can just make more of her stuff for stand ins lol. XD

Aw, get better D:

**TheoreticalSelkie** · 02-04-2014, 05:13 AM

Going to post my first character, I have a second character connected to this guy, but I don't have too much time between homework to work on him today.

Jack "Jackson" DeHanes

Spoiler:

Voltaire "Taire" Sangier

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Edited: Fixing stuff wooo

**Death's Spook** · 02-04-2014, 06:17 AM

Jack looks mostly good, except for one /major/ detail: his power is an explicit violation of the Krane Effect. It's a creative power that I like, but it can't violate that. I made that a hard and fast rule because otherwise powers get really broken really fast. I mean, in a world where there is no Krane Effect, Benjamin can decide to make your heart too heavy for your connective tissue and blood vessels, making it fall to the floor and out of your body. Therefore, that's a limitation I'm enforcing. Hard.

**Death's Spook** · 02-04-2014, 07:54 PM

*brick'd for double posting*

It's up!

Liked Benjamin's intro the best, followed by Sara. I'm hoping Molly gets more substance next post.

**Dragon Master Mike** · 02-05-2014, 07:39 PM

@Death's Spook, I tried to make my characters better. I don't think I did good enough. Rather than posting them over, I replaced the original submission.

http://www.pokemoncrossroads.com/for...ll=1#post56277

**TheoreticalSelkie** · 02-05-2014, 10:18 PM

@Death's Spook, I've changed Jack's power to only be used on non-biological targets, though this means that things such organic compounds are still affected and can be synthesized (like hydrocarbons, proteins, sugars, etc).

Also added another character. ^_^

**Dash** · 02-05-2014, 10:36 PM

Character is finished:

Spoiler:

**Princess Crow** · 02-05-2014, 11:09 PM

Likewise, finished!

Name: Ellen
Age: 14
Side: Neutral, but newly recruited by Lab
Rank: Newly recruited
Gender: Female
Appearance: Ellen stands at about 5’2’’. She’s rather thin but not to the point of being unhealthy. Her ragged auburn hair has grown longer than she’s used to, reaching several inches below her shoulders, but Ellen usually ties it up in a ponytail to keep it out of her face. She has dark hazel eyes with a tint of green. Her face is both round and angular - as she’s gotten older, her chin and cheekbones have become more defined, but she is still in the process of aging. She has fair skin with freckles speckled across her face, and her overall childish appearance is both helpful and deceptive at the same time.

Apparel-wise, Ellen prefers to keep things simple. She wears a graphic tee with a forest green parka several sizes too big. Her weather-resistant leggings compliment her pair of black combat boots. While Ellen might normally try and dress up, she understands the realities that the world is changing. While she’s particularly fond of these clothes and has been wearing them for quite a long time, she isn’t really attached to them. The one physical weapon that Ellen possesses, a switchblade, is tucked into her boot and is easily accessible in times of danger. Ellen carries a simple backpack where she puts her items and Pokeballs for safe storage, but when she’s actively using her Pokemon, she instead chooses to keep them in her jacket’s pockets for easier access.

If you’re more of an image-based person, here’s a link to a picture that I used for the base of my description - there are some small changes, but this is basically the design I attempted to use.

Personality: Perhaps in another world, Ellen would be like any other teenage girl. Falling over boys, playing sports, and acting social. At heart, she’s still just a child. But the world is cold and cruel, and she’s had to adapt to survive.

She’s rather quiet. In a world where love is foolish and trust is a death sentence, she’s learned to stay to herself. Her powers lead her to be more introverted. Likewise, she’s spent most of her life alone, so she finds it even harder to communicate with others. Yet, she also recognizes the safety in numbers. She’s become an expert at blending in (though not quite like a Stranger), and though she certainly likes being left alone, she fears being completely and entirely alone. In the rare times where Ellen has been able to finally feel comfortable, she becomes more extroverted with her emotions and is generally happier. But these feelings always fade, and Ellen is always left hurt. As such, she has become averse to opening up to anybody.

During times of crises, Ellen can generally handle herself. Her probabilistic detections of the future become increasingly potent in hand to hand combat, as she’s able to accurately predict many attacks several seconds before they ever occur. However, because she has become so reliant on these powers, when she is without them (in cases such as battling a Trump), she is entirely lost. Likewise, while Ellen is small and quick, she can only evade so many attacks - against a well qualified fighter, Ellen is sure to lose. This makes her very evasive and vulnerable at the same time.

Somehow, there has always been something in the back of her head, telling her something is wrong. Quite like the feeling of forgetting something, Ellen always feels like something is amiss, though she can’t quite place her finger on it. Whether this is simple backlash of her powers or something larger, Ellen doesn't know. She does know, however, that whatever is missing is extremely important to her as a person.

History: Be aware that some of this information has been modified or altered to protect Ellen. Not everything seen here is truth, but it is what Ellen knows of her past.

Ellen was born in Phenac City, living in a sandy adobe on the outskirts of town. Born to a single mother, Eden, distraught with a recent divorce, her infancy was quite confusing. Reminded of the man who left her broken, Eden found it hard to even look at Ellen. As such, Eden’s sole Pokemon, a Honchkrow, became an impromptu caretaker. Even at such a young age, Ellen vaguely remembers strange men in masks and skin suits would constantly roll through her house. They spoke of great change, a revolution to sweep the nation of Orre.

Only a few years passed before the men stopped coming. Likewise, shortly after their numbers decreased, Ellen and her mother moved to Agate Village. From there, Ellen and Eden lived their lives in relative peace. Eden became more and more motherly towards Ellen, and the Honchkrow even offered Ellen to raise one of her hatchlings. While in the Village of the Celebi, Ellen became exposed to the wonders of Pokemon. In secret, she began training with one of Agate’s elders to become a Pokemon trainer. It was during this time that Ellen obtained Machete and developed her own strength.

However, this peace could only last for so long. On a seemingly random day, an explosion of green light radiated all throughout Agate Village, and time stopped entirely. Except for Ellen and Eden. Scared and confused in the frozen world, Ellen was dragged by her mother to the Agate Stone. Resting atop the pillar was Celebi, the pixie of the forest herself. In a means of talking without words, Celebi explained to both Ellen and her mother that they were destined for great things, and that she would bless them with the power of sight. Laying a kiss upon their foreheads, when they awoke, a scene of chaos was built all around them. The second cluster had appeared, and Ellen’s mind essentially exploded, overrun with the possibilities of the future. She fell into a deep coma shortly after seeing the protector of time disappear.

When Ellen awoke, she was in an entirely new place. Later discovered to be Pyrite Town, she and her mother had apparently left Agate directly after the cluster appeared. Now in the City of Rogues, Ellen was lost and alone, thrown into a city torn apart by violence. Further, Eden became increasingly distant once more. Intense headaches plagued Ellen, but it seemed as if Eden held a more refined version of Ellen’s powers - instead of a probabilistic view of the future, it seemed as if Eden held the one true path to the future, and she was terrified of what she saw.

Mysterious men resumed appearing in their new house, located underground in the Under Keep. Ellen doesn’t remember them specifically, but she does remember being constantly afraid. She lived in a constant state of fear for several years until one day when Ellen was out, she returned to her house and found it utterly destroyed. Her mother was missing, and all that remained was a note tucked away in Ellen’s bed, buried under a mountain of rubble. In unusually scribbly handwriting, Eden informed Ellen of the planned kidnapping but also told her that her future was with the Lab. As such, Ellen left Pyrite and headed for the Lab, set on finding her mother once more.

Pokemon:

~~Princess Murkrow~~ Icarus the Murkrow - Male, Prankster.

Ellen’s starter Pokemon, she received Icarus as an egg from Ellen’s mother’s own starting Pokemon, a Honchkrow. At the age of 6, the egg hatched, and they’ve been inseparable ever since. Icarus is quite the prankster. His developed intelligence allows him to interact with humans in intelligent and creative ways. He is slightly manipulative and even a tad sadistic. Icarus is also very defensive of Ellen and the other team mates. While Icarus lacks the brawn and bulk to take down threats, he holds his own in battle by combining unique strategy with shady tactics. Often found perched on Ellen’s shoulder.
Machete the Ursaring - Male, Guts

Ellen’s powerhouse of the team. Machete was a weak Teddiursa when Ellen found it, starving in the outskirts of Agate. However, when Ellen was able to slowly nurse it back to health, Machete became loyal and formidable as a battler. It likewise became defensive of Ellen and her mother, capable of warding off most mundane threats. Now an Ursaring, Machete is capable of tearing apart humans and Pokemon alike with no reservations. Anybody threatening Ellen or her teammates have to go through Machete first, which is no easy feat.
Xatu - Female, Magic Bounce

Perhaps the strangest Pokemon on Ellen’s team, Xatu doesn’t consider herself as a captured Pokemon. Sure, Xatu has a Pokeball, but that’s only for storage and protection. Xatu joined Ellen’s team rather recently - Xatu was a gift from Ellen’s mother only days before her kidnapping. Ellen is Xatu’s equal, and they both understand that Xatu is so much more than just a Pokemon. With similar precognitive abilities, Xatu and Ellen are able to benefit from each other. Xatu is pretty weak as it is, but strong psychic powers allow for her to stand her ground when needed.
Violet the Ambipom - Female, Pickup

Violet (typically called Vi) was a gift from one of the elders of Agate, obtained mere days before the cluster appeared and she left. While Ellen and Violet don’t always see eye to eye because of conflicting definitions of “ownership,” Vi has proven to be a formidable ally to Ellen’s team. With double handed fist-tails of fury, Violet is nimble and strong. She takes a sort of motherly role towards Ellen and her team, feeling morally obligated to enact the elder’s last wish. As such, she becomes especially offensive when any of her allies are threatened. She and Machete form Ellen’s offensive core of the team.

Powers:

Thinker - Stage 7

Ellen holds a developing sense of precognition. While it is relatively minor compared to the levels of precognition that many strong Thinkers are able to achieve, Ellen is able to reliably see several seconds into the future. Occasionally, however, Ellen is able to see further. This only occurs for major events of “descending darkness,” such as the cataclysm and other similar events. Because nothing is set in stone for these far off occurrences, countless endings are visualized by Ellen, and as the event approaches, the likelihood of each outcome changes. This makes Ellen’s powers unreliable for events far off but incredibly useful for events that take place several seconds away (where the chances of it happening are near 100%). This makes her much more difficult to hit in physical combat, where she knows your attacks. However, this leaves her entirely vulnerable to surprise - against a strong, experienced fighter that knows how to deal with her, Ellen has no chance of winning the fight. Ellen also has heightened concentration and multi-tasking skills, so she isn’t entirely overwhelmed when observing the infinite possibilities of the future.
Tinker - Stage 3

A minor power that hardly compares to other Tinkers, Ellen has gained a small affinity with technology. While she is certainly handy with a screwdriver and general building of things, her true strengths are functions of her Thinker ratings. While there are many different possible creations associated with her powers, she only knows how to construct a device used to illustrate her thoughts and ideas. Quite like a modified Etch-a-Sketch designed to read the thoughts of the user, Ellen is able to directly portray her thoughts onto a tablet constructed of simple glass, metal, and sand. These can be illustrations, sentences, or countless other representations of her thoughts. This helps Ellen maintain clarity and order in her seemingly disorganized brain. This power is relatively new to Ellen’s knowledge - she hasn’t explored it to its maximum, but it is unlikely that this power will develop much further.

Other: Nope, no stealing of the moon here!!

**Death's Spook** · 02-08-2014, 06:57 AM

Ok. In general (this is a minor complaint with a disproportionate spiel): people are being very liberal with giving their characters a rating of 10 on the scale. 10 is for those whose powers are ridiculously out there, and it's ok if you don't have a ten rating: in fact, 99.99% of the parahumans in Orre probably don't.

To give you an idea of how hard it is to achieve a 10 rating: Sara, for example, is a Tinker who can literally improve upon the work of Victor Frakenstein... And manage her creations with an AI that puts Skynet and GLaDOS to shame. She can create new forms of life, and improve on what's already there.

She still has a /9/ in Tinkering. Not a ten.

The 10s are truly the extraordinary cases. Molly has a 10 Stranger rating because she can create multiple detailed illusions simultaneously while having them all act independently of her and each other. Because of the nature of her power, she can even fool night vision. And she can do this all within a radius of half a kilometer around her, leaving her capable of fooling entire portions cities and making them fall for her ruse if she plays her cards right. She can, in mid combat, make you look exactly like one of your enemies so that you're taken down by friendly fire.

/That's/ a ten rating. It's the Organization's way of saying "You know what? This power is ridiculous. Screw you guys, I'm going home." I mean, there's a reason that someone like, to single out names, Clydus is left relatively unmolested by everyone despite openly being a cape (and one with powers that are coveted by both sides, at that).

TL;DR: Be a little less liberal with the scores, basically. The rant was entirely disproportionate to the crime (especially because it's an easy fix), but it keeps my logic clear.

In order for the SUs:
@Dragon Master: I see barely any change to your SUs, and the main issue I asked you to address is completely untouched. No.
@TheoreticalSelkie: Just knock down Jack's Breaker rating to 8 and he should be fine. Taire's potential power will need kink sorting out, but that can be done when/if he gets them later and therefore is no obstacle to both characters being accepted.
@Lightning Dash: Chelsea looks mostly good. Her Stranger should be knocked down to about 7 or 8. It's powerful, but not to that extent. Her Striker is more problematic: it doesn't really play well with the Krane Effect. Fix those two things, and you should be fine, though.
@Princess Crow: Ellen is mostly good. The main phrase that's giving me fits is in her description of her Thinker ability, specifically, that she knows how to counter all moves against her. No. That's an instant win condition. Could future sight help? Absolutely. But it won't give you a perfect counter every time. It'll make you far harder to hit, but not impossible. Not by a long shot.

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