[WAR] What We Hope (PG)

[Pokemon Trainer Sarah]

Argh that's so sad. ;_; The way the guard just blurts out that Styzer died since it means nothing to him and the main character's reaction are really well contrasted. Poor Styzer. (Cool name btw!) :( I also enjoyed trying to guess what Pokemon Styzer was before you revealed it. :D

And just pointing out a couple things because I think you'd want to know. xD It's so easy to miss stuff in your own stories when you've read them over so many times! >_<

Others believe that there it’s a paradise waiting just beyond the horizon.

Should be "is".

and I was the heavy chuck of metal which slammed into the bars.

I think you meant "chunk"!

Good luck for the WAR! :D I liked this theme too, because I am a depressing person who likes sad stories and wants to make people cry. XD

GCEA: Rock Egg 1277
(ONLY FOR GCEA Not For PXR Egg Hunt)