Tri-Kappa Labs

[Noblejanobii]

1. That's true. And actually in my room, I can look out my window without even sitting up in my bed so I was a bit iffy with that descriptiveness. Like I said elsewhere I tend to keep the first chapter of a story short but also try to hook someone in so a lot of descriptiveness doesn't come in until the second chapter.

2. Like I didn't even know that span (in this definition) was a word. Like I knew time span but I have never ever heard someone say that before. Like I have a guy who narrates his actions and he says spun all the time.

3. It doesn't help that the device I usually type this on (my phone) autocorrects it. That's also why there are some weird wording errors sometimes (like I know there's one when Sloane is talking in chapter 3) because my phone autocorrects it.

4. Oh yeah and thanks for that! I appreciate all correction. I was just explaining that this is the dialect I'm used to so I feel more comfortable writing in this form. However when people are from different cultures I try to change the dialect to fit them but usually I fail at it.

5. Yes thank you. I need to stop doing that. Now sometimes I find it's justified. One example I can give is if they said like "He is a Generation 3." That's like an experiment number so I feel like in that case it would be ok because it's like a title. But in the case you're talking about you're absolutely right.

6. Oh! I completely missed that! Yeah I understand what you mean now. To be honest I can't remember why I added that. Possibly to create more suspense or something. I wrote that at like 3 am though so who knows what I was thinking.

7. Right right. Like I said before I generally just try to hook people in the first chapter then introduce you to everyone in the second and following chapters. I'm not sure why to be honest but it's what I've always done.

Well thank you! And what I meant was like if I'm having a bad day I tend to snap at people, especially critics. I was actually know on another website many years ago for cursing out a critic when they just caught me on a really bad day. Also, expect that chapter 5 will still have some of these errors because I've been writing it for a while and I don't catch everything. Chapter 6 will be better, I promise.