[WAR] Season II: Creative Writing

[Suicune's Fire]

Week Four Theme by NeoEmolga
The Phoenix Battalion

Originality (20/20)
Following Objectives (30/30)
Spelling and Grammar (9/10)
Flow and Transition (20/20)
Hook and Interest (20/20)

TOTAL: 99/100

Neo, I just have to say... Wow. This piece really can't be expressed in any other way than "WOW!"

I was not expecting such a twist as this, and I'm sure nobody else was, either! It's fun, it's interesting, and it has a really, really strong hook. All those parameters paired with an awesome theme?! Of COURSE you got full marks for those categories!


Your only downfall was the use of "lays" when it should have been "lies." You were NEARLY there! I'm very happy to award you those 99 points, though.



tl;dr:

OMG YES THIS IS GOING TO BE AWESOME.