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Awww Gible! You slept through Christmas! That was a silly thing to do! xD Omg I can't believe he did that. I loved the comic though. The rhyming was great. And the groudon plushie is so adorable. <3 There were a few errors though, which I can help with. x)
First panel: I think it should say "When I arose to such a clutter!"
Second panel: I reckon "sprang" would work better than "spring" since it's all in past tense.
Fourth panel: Maybe Gible's speech should end with a question mark.
I don't think "appear" and "hair" rhyme, but maybe they do with different accents. xD
The panel where Delibird is stealing everything: Should be "It was as they warned us"
The panel with Delibird walking away with the presents in his sack: There shouldn't be a period on the end of "After all was said and done" because the sentence continues. x)
And that's all! xD But really, I loved this edition. It was very funny and well drawn. I especially like Gible's frightened face near the end. XD
SO EXCITED FOR MINE!!!
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