Since I've No Place to Go [Winter Carnival Heartwarming Story]

[Suicune's Fire]

There were a few bronze coins and even one made out of silver that was so cold to the touch that it almost burned his scaled hand when he touched it.

Because you said "cold to the touch" already, there's no need for "when he touched it" at the end.

the Charmander made his way past the half-buried seesaw over two the modest swing set on the edge of the playground and began clearing the seat of snow.

Should be "to" not "two."

“I knew this little one,” a Clefable said excitedly to her friends, and they bobbed their heads in unison.

It's weird to me that she would be excited about it... xD Shouldn't she be horrified instead? Or sad?


That poor little charmander. :( What a terrible little life he had. I bet he would get a lot of nos, especially since fire types wouldn't be hard to come by, or even pokemon who have access to fire type moves. Then there are also lighters. It's sad that his employer is abusive as well. I wonder where his brother went, if he was the provider and then just up and vanished. :c

I think the sad ending is a nice way to end it. Sort of heartwarming in a sad way. But I also like the happy ending, haha. How curious about the Snorlax! It does make me wonder. :3

Anyway, great job! :D Definitely heartwarming, but also really sad. Nice story!